Saturday, January 19, 2013

Picture This! Friday Free Writing Samples

This week's Friday Free Write was a picture of the waves crashing. I know, it is still January! But I just couldn't help it. It was a bit chilly yesterday, and I was really wanting to think warm thoughts. The students did a great job with their writing and sharing! When I asked for volunteers, all hands flew into the air. This week they took ownership in their work and were proud of it (maybe the picture sparked warm thoughts for them, too!). They were all so descriptive. Here are a couple of the samples of writing from yesterday.


Student 1:
The crashing waves
The sandy beach
The things I crave
Are at my feet

There's nowhere else I'd rather be
Not castle, nor creek
Nor mountain high
Nor flying in the vast, blue sky

The beach is my home
With salt in my hair and sand at my feet
I watch waves covered with foam
It sets my soul free

Here, I will always stay young
With the air's salty taste on my tongue
Dancing waves put me in a daze
And the world flies around me twirling, twirling

Lying on the beach, nothing can beat
This feeling I have
It makes my heart flutter
For this feeling, there is no other.

Student 2's Introduction:

I watched as the waves crashed against the shore. I saw the salty foam creep up and down the shoreline as I made my way to the water. As the salthy froth touched my feet, I turned back and set my things down. Taking a running start, I rammed an oncoming wave and felt the shocking cold creep from my head to my toes. I stayed submerged for a moment trying to adapt to teh temperature, but I found myself needing to breathe. I rocketed toward the foamy surface. As I broke through the still water, I felt something hit me on my side. Terrorized, all I could think was "SHARK"! ...

7 comments:

  1. Love it! I loved reading about the Friday Free Writing on All Things Upper Elementary, so it's great to see the samples. You have some talented writers! Thanks for sharing. :)

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    1. Thank you! I thought they did a great job yesterday.

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  3. I love your idea! Thank you so much for sharing! Your student samples are amazing.
    Laura
    TIPS: Teach, Inspire, and Prepare Students

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    1. You're welcome! Thanks for visiting! I follow your blog, too.

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  4. You've got some good little writers in your class!

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  5. Too cute!! This is great!

    Brittany
    http://thesuperheroteacher.blogspot.com/

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